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You can't tell me
that my writing is wrong.
It might be for you
But for me it will live, forever strong
 
You can't tell me
that my words are not right.
They might not be prefect
But I'll still put up a fight
 
You can't tell me
my rhymes are too mix-matched.
Its just because they are not yours
To me they do not lack
 
You can't tell me
I did not try my best.
Who are you to evaluate?
Its not like its a test
 
You can't tell me
that I didn't follow a rule.
Creativity has no list
I think you are a fool
 
You can't tell me
that I didn't emote at all.
How can you tell me what I feel?
Its not like I'm a doll
 
You cant tell me
everything that I should.
How can you think you know everything?
And think you know whats "good"?
 
 
well my LA teacher is kinda pissing me off at the moment. nothing i ever write for her is right.
you have to follow her rules EXACTLY and u get a good mark. all the mainstream kids get by but creativity is almost completely ignored, and i think thats what poetry is all about. being creative with words, being emtotional, being true and yourself. and i get punished for this with grades that i do not deserve. Of course, yes maybe im over reacting, and yes teachers are there to do their job but i feel just so frusterated >:[ so to you now, oh great and powerful LA teacher, i bid you thanks for inspiration. sorry if this rubs people the wrong way but GAHHHHHHHHH
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Princesstekki Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I side with you. I have experienced something similar in my arts class in grade 9 so I know how you feel. 
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CureLovelyWarrior Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
I am on your side! So is my best friend :iconprincesstekki:
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DJ-Bleach Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
"You Can't Tell Me, aka, DA teenager can’t stand that her teacher is doing her job and whiiiines about it in poetry form."

Quote from tumblr, not from me. Though I do agree with it.
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AnythingBtOrdinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I understand if teachers are trying to follow a ciriculum or something or teach different types of writng (Haiku, Songs etc.) but seriously I think everyone (especially those who are naturally creative) need some breathing room and the opportunity to express themself freely with like a free write in theirown way at some point.:)
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AnythingBtOrdinary Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Damn!!!!!! LOVE IT!:) story of my LIFE!:)
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arisufae Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mainstream kids.
Craigbutt,
are you becoming a hipster? D8
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Mimibert Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol frusteration is hipstering meh BNF... hopefully not. if i do become hipster please hit me side the head with baseball bat <3
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arisufae Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Kay, BNF. <3
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SpyPhoenix44 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This reminds me of my art teacher she was loopy!!! :<
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kage-niji Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This sounds like my old art teacher... all the creative people in the class got low marks, when their art was extraordinary. I understand how you feel.
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Zeltol Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Your teacher is doing her job. If you don't do the assignments correctly, you're going to get a bad grade. Your creativity is not being "punished."

If you want recognition instead of suggestions for how to improve your craft, by all means, ignore your teacher and keep whining on DA because people seem to like you here.
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ManiacalCupcakeXD Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it's time for your teacher to get another job.. As a secretary or something like that..! -__-

Wonderful poem I know the feeling! >: (
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ViciousZen Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The funny thing about a teacher is that they're just people, and as it turns out, people have opinions. Not everyone is going to like, or enjoy your work. Don't feel discouraged. If you enjoy the art form, and want to improve, move forward, and grow as an artist, you have to take in all bits of input, and use them for what they're worth. If you feel the input is hindering you, take it with a grain of salt.

Also, as far as this goes: "all the mainstream kids get by but creativity is almost completely ignored"
So, it's wrong for a teacher to criticize your work (which is his/her job), but it's okay for you to deprecate another's work? Doesn't make sense to me.

Now, I'm going to be criticizing you, which I do realize has a touch of irony to it, brace yourself.

As far as your piece goes, I'm going to be honest, and tell you that I find it to be a very formulaic poem. I like your idea, but I feel like it's not fleshed out enough, like you're only touching the surface. It's not that I didn't enjoy it, because I did, but that I feel like there's so much more you could do with it.

I liked this line: "How can you tell me what I feel?
Its not like I'm a doll"

It's a good visual, very fitting for the piece, but the stanza itself lacks flow, and reads kind of awkwardly.

You seem trapped in your rhyme scheme, writing things just to keep your rhyme scheme going. It seems mostly obvious in your second, fifth, and sixth stanzas. They don't seem to have any flow to them. Any time you are going to be doing a rhyming poem, it comes off much more naturally to try to rhyme based on what you're writing, not writing based on what you're rhyming. If you can't find a natural sounding rhyme, you're better off trying to restructure your sentences, picking a different word, or something. Don't try and force it. Rhyme schemes can be limiting, but once you've got some more practice with them under your belt, you'll find it a much more natural process.

Also, you have some spelling mistakes. Mix-matched isn't a real term, I think you were looking for mismatched. You have a few "its" in there, which should be "it's." Also, a can't without a comma, and your last "whats" should be a "what's" or a "what is."

I don't mean to come off as harsh, but you have obvious potential, and shouldn't let yourself become stagnant. Always look to grow as an artist, and use these things to improve yourself.
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animatedastronaut Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
What I mean by what I said is that it's a little maddening and discouraging. I have since come to the conclusion that the "un-creative" ones get the nods because they maybe need more motivation? I don't know.
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animatedastronaut Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
"all the mainstream kids get by but creativity is almost completely ignored"

That's sort of true though. Just from experience. It's true with every class and every school I've been to. Not saying I'm good at everything, but it just doesn't seem right when a kid writes their friends' name on notebook paper then decorates it with little stars and gets a "Oh, Sabrina, that looks really nice!" from some teacher while I'm sitting here trying to work on hand/head proportions.
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AdjoaKiss1 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
its wonderful...I think so
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Feral-Night Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student General Artist
The guy who created FedEX was told by his teachers that his idea sucked. And look at him now, he's running one of the top shipping companies in the world. Show's you how wrong teachers can be.
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curlyteng Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
My teachers suck! They say im bad in literature when thats my favorite class!
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immortalSi Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Agreed. Some people are very closed minded. I, myself, have had some terrible teachers, but I still do things my way (because my way is awesome).
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RedHeadedBitch Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   Writer
I took a creative writing course in college, and was failed in the lyrics section, when that's about all I do with my life. Some teachers are just idiots
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