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Transluscent lines of a river's fold

Gems of blue and fish of gold

Shimmer and dance, the embrace of an old friend

Down the steady shores of a riverbend.

 

Smooth canoe tracks over gentle rides

 Over gentle stones with a gentle glide

Gentle, gentle. Will these softened turns end?

Down the steady shores of a riverbend?

 

But is the river really steady?  

Or maybe I'm just not ready

Skies are whispy and clouds in flame, is this pretend?

Down the steady shores of a riverbend?

 

These waters are always churning

Always flowing and always turning

With my future on a teater, on this brand new pend

Down the steady shores of a riverbend

 

I can't see past these rugged waves

Icecap tips, I'm the waters slave

How will I ever live, if my dreams cannot extend

Down the steady shores of a riverbend?

 

Familiar lines are washed and shed

Blue walls are now crashing instead

Is this really where I belong, where my fate will end?

Down the steady shores of a riverbend

well this is for :iconwriters--club: 's writing tournament for ROUND III OMG i feel so accomplished :D anyway the theme is:What Awaits at the Farthest Ends. i chose a river because its kinda endless almost and it cant really end. it just changes. I used "riverbend" because life is unpredicatble and anything can happen and you cant see beyond the bend of the river which acts as life. :D lol welll wish me luck and any feedback would be aamazing thank you guise! :P
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arisufae Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can't help but think of Pocahontas.

And Pocahontas is RiRi. 8D

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I just squee'd.
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Mimibert Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
OMG.. POCAHONTAS OMG THATS WHERE "RIVERBEND" CAME FROM!!! LOL!!! i was like... "where did i come up with riverbend? LOL OMG! and... WOAH she does look like pocahontas.. and pocahontas is like my fav disney person... O_O it makes sense now! lol
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arisufae Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
SEE? SEEEEEE? xDDDD
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peacewing7593 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student General Artist
I LUV IT! and your comparison with it to life makes perfect sense, keep up the good work :D
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ReiReiSerenade Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's great! :clap:
i really liked how to used comparisons :D
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i really love the meter in this. great use of imabic pentameter!
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