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Dear eyes 
I'm sorry for all the tears that I made you shed. 
I wish I could have kept you dry instead. 
Those nights I didn't let you rest
I'm sorry for being such a pest

Dear feet
I'm sorry for fumbling to the ground 
I wish I had done something more profound
I just couldn't  wait to fall
For those people who said they would be there if I call 

Dear ears
Sorry for all those nights of crying myself under
I wish I could have made a silent surrender
For those sweet words you heard and believed
I'm sorry, but they were from people who stole and thieved
 
 Dear heart
I'm sorry I didn't listen to you from the start 
Now my life is falling apart
I should have believed that you were right
I wish I had given you more of a fight

Dear wrists 
Sorry for letting those dancers dance and dice
What they did wasn't too nice
Stripes suit you fairly well
Too bad I had to put you through hell

Dear mind
Sorry for messing you up so bad
I hope that didn't make you too mad
You were fine before I invaded  
Now your broken and your beauty has faded

Dear me
Sorry for making you a mess 
But I find all of this hard to repress
After all, it's only me being us
And the worst thing to possibly be is us

And even worse is being me
Feeling the sad ATM :(
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OrientalArc Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
It is ME…. as well..!!!
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MisterTotality Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
Trying to reconcile everything with your body and mind after going through a personal Hell.  So many of us have been there.  You're not alone.
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thysilverdoe Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Professional Writer
This is beautifully tragic, but I'm sorry you're feeling so poorly. Keep your chin up, it'll get better, you can't have a rainbow without some rain!
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hunters-n-cheekbones Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... I got chills. This is absolutely beautiful but I hope that whatever is making sad clears up soon :c
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ZeroGirl6681 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hope you feel better soon ;-;
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JulioCMiranda Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked the detail you placed in describing various
abuse and punishments to the parts of the body,
and I also liked where you were going as your entire
person was involved.

The ending stanza of "Dear me" was a nice summary of your feelings,
and the last line alone was profound.

But you've used periods at the end of only two lines,
where at the ends of the rest there's nothing.
Any significance there?
There was also a jumbling of words in some areas that broke up
the fluidity of the poem at times, maybe a little editing?

Overall a nice read, Mimibert, and keep at it.
Your feelings will eventually flow as evenly as a river in time.
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pokemonsonic345 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm sorry about whatever made you so sad.
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arisufae Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;___;
craigbutt
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Mimibert Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
da feels is strong recently ;-;
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